Need an extra うin せんりゅう! What does だ mean at the end of the lines in the first and second senryuus?
In the first senryuu, maybe change おもしろい to たのしいto make it 7 moras. Anyway, the second senryuu is my favorite. I like its use of kanji along with katakana.
Your せんりゅう aren't so strict syllabically, but they're still quite good. Badminton is an interesting sport indeed. By the way you need three せんりゅう, so I would add one for the revision! "だ" is a shortened form of です yes?
Need an extra うin せんりゅう! What does だ mean at the end of the lines in the first and second senryuus?
ReplyDeleteIn the first senryuu, maybe change おもしろい to たのしいto make it 7 moras. Anyway, the second senryuu is my favorite. I like its use of kanji along with katakana.
Your せんりゅう aren't so strict syllabically, but they're still quite good. Badminton is an interesting sport indeed. By the way you need three せんりゅう, so I would add one for the revision! "だ" is a shortened form of です yes?
ReplyDeletei'm impressed that you're using all three kinds of letters of Japanese in your せんりゅう。わたしはこのせんりゅうがとてもすきです。
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this is interesting. your first 2 sentences make the following soundも かわいくないで